Comments on: Lyric check: “Waiting in the Wings” http://colortheory.com/waiting-in-the-wings electronic indie piano pop Wed, 08 Sep 2010 20:34:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: Brian Hazard http://colortheory.com/waiting-in-the-wings#comment-203 Brian Hazard Wed, 09 Sep 2009 04:10:04 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1227#comment-203 You can hear the completed song here: http://www.thesixtyone.com/theoddyear/song/64528 You can hear the completed song here:

http://www.thesixtyone.com/theoddyear/song/64528

]]> By: zachary http://colortheory.com/waiting-in-the-wings#comment-198 zachary Sun, 30 Aug 2009 16:06:15 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1227#comment-198 Yeah I'm fairly into the lyrics, they fare a little cheesy. But it was alright. :) I'm diggin the piano too, lol. Yeah I’m fairly into the lyrics, they fare a little cheesy. But it was alright. :)
I’m diggin the piano too, lol.

]]> By: richard http://colortheory.com/waiting-in-the-wings#comment-197 richard Wed, 26 Aug 2009 19:42:06 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1227#comment-197 hi brian lyrics are fine and love the music cant wait to hear them together and your voice . when the three come together it will be great , hi brian lyrics are fine and love the music cant wait to hear them together and your voice . when the three come together it will be great ,

]]> By: Nader http://colortheory.com/waiting-in-the-wings#comment-194 Nader Mon, 24 Aug 2009 14:46:26 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1227#comment-194 Brian, Not cheesy at all. Raymi & Paul are spot on: PERHAPS me in another life Cheers Nader Brian,

Not cheesy at all. Raymi & Paul are spot on:

PERHAPS me in another life

Cheers

Nader

]]> By: Brian Hazard http://colortheory.com/waiting-in-the-wings#comment-190 Brian Hazard Sat, 22 Aug 2009 18:43:17 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1227#comment-190 Lots more great comments - thank you! I'm pleased and relieved to see that the overall story and intent is coming through. That's always my main worry - that the lyrics could be interpreted in a totally different (and unsatisfying) way. As for the details, I suppose I could live with removing "THE me" and "OF churches" but I could go either way. I did make a little swap already ("to" and "and" in the 5th and 6th lines of the chorus). Seems like it's pretty much good to go. I'm grateful for your quick input, because after 24 hours or so my lyrics always seem to solidify in my mind. I lose my objectivity and get lazy. I'll try to record vocals and wrap it up this week. I'm mixing this one myself, so it shouldn't take long. Lots more great comments – thank you!

I’m pleased and relieved to see that the overall story and intent is coming through. That’s always my main worry – that the lyrics could be interpreted in a totally different (and unsatisfying) way.

As for the details, I suppose I could live with removing “THE me” and “OF churches” but I could go either way. I did make a little swap already (“to” and “and” in the 5th and 6th lines of the chorus).

Seems like it’s pretty much good to go. I’m grateful for your quick input, because after 24 hours or so my lyrics always seem to solidify in my mind. I lose my objectivity and get lazy. I’ll try to record vocals and wrap it up this week. I’m mixing this one myself, so it shouldn’t take long.

]]> By: Raymi&Paul http://colortheory.com/waiting-in-the-wings#comment-188 Raymi&Paul Sat, 22 Aug 2009 07:52:31 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1227#comment-188 Input; Another plotline Another script Perhaps me in another life could win you over and snatch you up To claim you as my wife Until you stamp out My stubborn schemes Of churches and wedding dreams I’ll be content to bide my time Waiting in the wings Input;

Another plotline
Another script
Perhaps me in another life
could win you over
and snatch you up
To claim you as my wife
Until you stamp out
My stubborn schemes
Of churches and wedding dreams
I’ll be content to bide my time
Waiting in the wings

]]> By: j?nes http://colortheory.com/waiting-in-the-wings#comment-187 j?nes Sat, 22 Aug 2009 05:43:25 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1227#comment-187 Yep. i can get what your going for. . . . questions , time , answers , life.. . .i say go for it! warmth, janes. xxxx Yep. i can get what your going for. . . .
questions , time , answers , life.. . .i say go for it!
warmth, janes.
xxxx

]]> By: Daniel http://colortheory.com/waiting-in-the-wings#comment-186 Daniel Sat, 22 Aug 2009 05:30:17 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1227#comment-186 Hi Brian, To address your question of "Of Churches and Matching Rings" - I almost think you could take "Of" out and it still makes complete sense and the flow still works from the previous line. Dan Hi Brian,

To address your question of “Of Churches and Matching Rings” – I almost think you could take “Of” out and it still makes complete sense and the flow still works from the previous line.

Dan

]]> By: Edith Hirshtal http://colortheory.com/waiting-in-the-wings#comment-185 Edith Hirshtal Sat, 22 Aug 2009 04:53:43 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1227#comment-185 Hi Brian, I love the lyrics to this song and it is very clearly written. Maybe is such a powerful word and I wouldn't change a thing. As for the last song, I really had not much to say, since I felt it very necessary to hear how the music and the lyrics fit together. These lyrics are sheer poetry and can stand on their own, as far as my tastes are concerned. It may have something to do with being much older than you and many of your fans and also the fact that I am a woman . Who knows? I admire your conviction, but also respect your asking for feedback. It confirms how secure you are with who you are as an artist. Best wishes from NYC. Edith Hi Brian,

I love the lyrics to this song and it is very clearly written. Maybe is such a powerful word and I wouldn’t change a thing. As for the last song, I really had not much to say, since I felt it very necessary to hear how the music and the lyrics fit together.
These lyrics are sheer poetry and can stand on their own, as far as my tastes are concerned.
It may have something to do with being much older than you and many of your fans and also the fact that I am a woman .
Who knows?
I admire your conviction, but also respect your asking for feedback.
It confirms how secure you are with who you are as an artist.
Best wishes from NYC. Edith

]]> By: AB from MF http://colortheory.com/waiting-in-the-wings#comment-184 AB from MF Sat, 22 Aug 2009 03:55:32 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1227#comment-184 So, I liked all of it but am struggling with the last part. I think I need to hear that part sung because I was right there with you on all of it until the last lines. I liked it overall, it's very catchy. So, I liked all of it but am struggling with the last part. I think I need to hear that part sung because I was right there with you on all of it until the last lines. I liked it overall, it’s very catchy.

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