Comments on: lyric check: Extroverts at Play http://colortheory.com/lyric-check-extroverts-at-play electronic indie piano pop Wed, 18 Jan 2012 18:01:27 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Brian Hazardhttp://colortheory.com/lyric-check-extroverts-at-play#comment-634 Brian Hazard Wed, 16 Jun 2010 01:51:34 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=2132#comment-634 Thanks Erika! I'm rendering what might be the final mix as I type this. I'm really excited for you to hear it, but I need to focus on wrapping up the other tracks! I'm planning to rework two or three that aren't happening for me just yet. Thanks Erika! I’m rendering what might be the final mix as I type this. I’m really excited for you to hear it, but I need to focus on wrapping up the other tracks! I’m planning to rework two or three that aren’t happening for me just yet.

]]> By: Erika Nilssonhttp://colortheory.com/lyric-check-extroverts-at-play#comment-633 Erika Nilsson Tue, 15 Jun 2010 22:44:09 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=2132#comment-633 Just for the record, I can't stop humming this song! The bridges ("Maybe someday this will ...") are absolutely lovely in their jazziness, and the verse melody is so catchy it hurts. :)I know you've already recorded the song, which is why I'm only giving praise here ... then again, I couldn't come up with any bad things to say if I tried. I love this song! Just for the record, I can’t stop humming this song! The bridges (“Maybe someday this will …”) are absolutely lovely in their jazziness, and the verse melody is so catchy it hurts. :)

I know you’ve already recorded the song, which is why I’m only giving praise here … then again, I couldn’t come up with any bad things to say if I tried. I love this song!

]]> By: Brian Hazardhttp://colortheory.com/lyric-check-extroverts-at-play#comment-605 Brian Hazard Tue, 25 May 2010 03:42:47 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=2132#comment-605 That is indeed what I meant! Your wording is more accurate, but a little unnatural to sing. That is indeed what I meant! Your wording is more accurate, but a little unnatural to sing.

]]> By: Guyhttp://colortheory.com/lyric-check-extroverts-at-play#comment-604 Guy Mon, 24 May 2010 18:08:32 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=2132#comment-604 Hehe, yeah that makes sense... whenever I try to sing "Touch" the line "Apologies that won't take the blame" comes out "Apologies that won't accept blame."I'm not even entirely sure that's the meaning you intended for it (could have been "take away/negate the blame.") Hehe, yeah that makes sense… whenever I try to sing “Touch” the line “Apologies that won’t take the blame” comes out “Apologies that won’t accept blame.”

I’m not even entirely sure that’s the meaning you intended for it (could have been “take away/negate the blame.”)

]]> By: Brian Hazardhttp://colortheory.com/lyric-check-extroverts-at-play#comment-603 Brian Hazard Mon, 24 May 2010 16:07:28 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=2132#comment-603 OK, the song is done! I changed "not so far-fetched" to "not such a stretch." That wasn't any conscious choice on my part - I just sang it that way! OK, the song is done! I changed “not so far-fetched” to “not such a stretch.” That wasn’t any conscious choice on my part – I just sang it that way!

]]> By: Brian Hazardhttp://colortheory.com/lyric-check-extroverts-at-play#comment-594 Brian Hazard Thu, 20 May 2010 03:09:52 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=2132#comment-594 Great feedback - thanks!While New Order got away with naming their songs randomly, I believe it worked against them. I think it's important to know what the title of a song is from hearing it. And really, isn't "Every Time I See You Falling" a better title than "Bizarre Love Triangle"?Actually, the original original title was "Pretending to Be Extroverts." The more time passes, the better I feel about "Extroverts at Play."Britt, to me at least, "sheer force of will" isn't cliché at all. "Fake it 'til we make it" on the other hand... ;) Great feedback – thanks!

While New Order got away with naming their songs randomly, I believe it worked against them. I think it’s important to know what the title of a song is from hearing it. And really, isn’t “Every Time I See You Falling” a better title than “Bizarre Love Triangle”?

Actually, the original original title was “Pretending to Be Extroverts.” The more time passes, the better I feel about “Extroverts at Play.”

Britt, to me at least, “sheer force of will” isn’t cliché at all. “Fake it ’til we make it” on the other hand… ;)

]]> By: 907Britthttp://colortheory.com/lyric-check-extroverts-at-play#comment-593 907Britt Thu, 20 May 2010 02:16:15 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=2132#comment-593 Brian, this is just the right amount of tongue in cheek. I like it when you sneak off to pretend to take a call. The only weak part is "sheer force of will" --- I just sang that cliche last night in someone else's song I was learning....I think "will" can stay for the rhyme, like "the strength of our will" or something. But that's small potatoes. I probably wouldn't have even noticed if it weren't in Richie's song. Brian, this is just the right amount of tongue in cheek. I like it when you sneak off to pretend to take a call. The only weak part is “sheer force of will” — I just sang that cliche last night in someone else’s song I was learning….I think “will” can stay for the rhyme, like “the strength of our will” or something. But that’s small potatoes. I probably wouldn’t have even noticed if it weren’t in Richie’s song.

]]> By: Guyhttp://colortheory.com/lyric-check-extroverts-at-play#comment-592 Guy Wed, 19 May 2010 23:05:47 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=2132#comment-592 It doesn't have to be in the lyrics to be the title. Think about most New Order songs. Heh, might be fun to title it something like, "Playing at Extraversion.""Pretend Extroverts" is still a suitable title as I take it they're all pretend extroverts? Nobody there is comfortable.I like the line "I’m the life of the party and it is the death of me."This will sound incredible. Don't remember if I said that when you just gave the music sample, but the meter and scansion you have for the lyrics just goes great with it, I kept rocking my shoulders listening to it. It doesn’t have to be in the lyrics to be the title. Think about most New Order songs. Heh, might be fun to title it something like, “Playing at Extraversion.”

“Pretend Extroverts” is still a suitable title as I take it they’re all pretend extroverts? Nobody there is comfortable.

I like the line “I’m the life of the party and it is the death of me.”

This will sound incredible. Don’t remember if I said that when you just gave the music sample, but the meter and scansion you have for the lyrics just goes great with it, I kept rocking my shoulders listening to it.

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