Comments on: Lyric check: “Exclusively Unhappy” http://colortheory.com/exclusively-unhappy electronic indie piano pop Wed, 08 Sep 2010 20:34:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: Adina http://colortheory.com/exclusively-unhappy#comment-199 Adina Mon, 31 Aug 2009 00:04:45 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1181#comment-199 Hey Brian, Love the lyrics! They're amazing! You always manage to infuse a scientific feel into your music and lyrics and I really like that. As a side comment. About the DM wannabe thing, everyone knows that DM is an inspiration for your creativity. Subconscious or whatever, i love that lyric. Keep it. If anything, it will be seen as a send up to DM. Hey Brian,
Love the lyrics! They’re amazing! You always manage to infuse a scientific feel into your music and lyrics and I really like that. As a side comment. About the DM wannabe thing, everyone knows that DM is an inspiration for your creativity. Subconscious or whatever, i love that lyric. Keep it. If anything, it will be seen as a send up to DM.

]]> By: djkenny http://colortheory.com/exclusively-unhappy#comment-193 djkenny Mon, 24 Aug 2009 06:38:47 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1181#comment-193 Heh...Yup, that is the tune. Yeah....there is far worse things to be called. Best, Kenny Heh…Yup, that is the tune.

Yeah….there is far worse things to be called.

Best,

Kenny

]]> By: Brian Hazard http://colortheory.com/exclusively-unhappy#comment-192 Brian Hazard Sat, 22 Aug 2009 18:50:34 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1181#comment-192 I had to Google it. Is it just "Sea of Sin"? That's so obscure even I didn't know it! I had to Google it. Is it just “Sea of Sin”? That’s so obscure even I didn’t know it!

]]> By: Brian Hazard http://colortheory.com/exclusively-unhappy#comment-191 Brian Hazard Sat, 22 Aug 2009 18:49:04 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1181#comment-191 Kenny, I can't off the top of my head think of a DM lyric with "consolation prize." Maybe that's just a subconscious defense mechanism on my part ;). Regardless, it's already recorded and the vocals delivered. I've been called worse things that a DM wannabe, so it's all good. I'll continue to post lyrics before they're recorded - it's been very helpful! Kenny, I can’t off the top of my head think of a DM lyric with “consolation prize.” Maybe that’s just a subconscious defense mechanism on my part ;) . Regardless, it’s already recorded and the vocals delivered. I’ve been called worse things that a DM wannabe, so it’s all good.

I’ll continue to post lyrics before they’re recorded – it’s been very helpful!

]]> By: djkenny http://colortheory.com/exclusively-unhappy#comment-189 djkenny Sat, 22 Aug 2009 18:15:31 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1181#comment-189 I would be sketch on using "consolation prize"... that is going to pigeon hole you as a Depeche Mode wanna be. Not that I dislike DM, obviously, but that is such the easily identified lyric of a DM tune. I just started singing DM as soon as I read the lyric...likely something you do not want a listener to do. Lord of the Flies reference will push you into synth pop/trekky/nerdyness. ;) I like this part: There is something noble in This constant flinging of dirt Cultivating my fight-or-flight responses Forever on the alert. I read that lyric and thought "that is Color Theory", not someone ripping off a lyric, or being anything other than themselves...something you probably want others to do as well. I love that you are sharing with us. Brilliant Brian! What a great way to invite others into the process. Too cool. I would be sketch on using “consolation prize”… that is going to pigeon hole you as a Depeche Mode wanna be. Not that I dislike DM, obviously, but that is such the easily identified lyric of a DM tune. I just started singing DM as soon as I read the lyric…likely something you do not want a listener to do.

Lord of the Flies reference will push you into synth pop/trekky/nerdyness. ;)

I like this part:
There is something noble in
This constant flinging of dirt
Cultivating my fight-or-flight responses
Forever on the alert.

I read that lyric and thought “that is Color Theory”, not someone ripping off a lyric, or being anything other than themselves…something you probably want others to do as well.

I love that you are sharing with us.
Brilliant Brian! What a great way to invite others into the process. Too cool.

]]> By: Lovella http://colortheory.com/exclusively-unhappy#comment-173 Lovella Thu, 20 Aug 2009 18:47:16 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1181#comment-173 Hi Brian, I like the lyrics, very good. Yes, the change to the original "lord of the flies" part is much better. Can't wait to hear the song finished. All the best. Hi Brian,

I like the lyrics, very good. Yes, the change to the original “lord of the flies” part is much better. Can’t wait to hear the song finished. All the best.

]]> By: Brian Hazard http://colortheory.com/exclusively-unhappy#comment-167 Brian Hazard Tue, 18 Aug 2009 15:59:09 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1181#comment-167 Achilles, thanks for your poet's insight. I'm pleased to hear that "Hypothetically" was honest, dark, and direct enough to catch your attention. If it's any consolation, it started off as a love song before taking a life of its own. Stephen, I'm glad I didn't catch my grammar mistake, because I like the line and I wouldn't have allowed myself to keep it! Misha, you are very kind. Hehe... np Nader, I'll just drop that one part. ;) Victor, yes, the opening line is deliberately copping Frank Sinatra's "My Way." I admit I struggle to find the balance between clever and direct, but in this case, I'm hoping the cleverness comes off as sarcasm. This morning Jon e-mailed and said he liked both the lyrics and the melody, so it looks like we're good to go! Unless my voice gives me trouble, I should be able to wrap up in a day or two. Thanks again for all your help everyone! I hope you enjoyed this process as much as I did. I'm convinced it made for a better lyric. I've got one more collaboration to do before beginning the album in earnest, so expect another set of lyrics soon! Achilles, thanks for your poet’s insight. I’m pleased to hear that “Hypothetically” was honest, dark, and direct enough to catch your attention. If it’s any consolation, it started off as a love song before taking a life of its own.

Stephen, I’m glad I didn’t catch my grammar mistake, because I like the line and I wouldn’t have allowed myself to keep it!

Misha, you are very kind.

Hehe… np Nader, I’ll just drop that one part. ;)

Victor, yes, the opening line is deliberately copping Frank Sinatra’s “My Way.” I admit I struggle to find the balance between clever and direct, but in this case, I’m hoping the cleverness comes off as sarcasm.

This morning Jon e-mailed and said he liked both the lyrics and the melody, so it looks like we’re good to go! Unless my voice gives me trouble, I should be able to wrap up in a day or two.

Thanks again for all your help everyone! I hope you enjoyed this process as much as I did. I’m convinced it made for a better lyric. I’ve got one more collaboration to do before beginning the album in earnest, so expect another set of lyrics soon!

]]> By: Victor http://colortheory.com/exclusively-unhappy#comment-166 Victor Tue, 18 Aug 2009 15:52:24 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1181#comment-166 I like the message you're telling but I it seems that at times you're being lyrically clever for the sake of being clever. It's important to avoid all the old cliches, but there's also a lot to be said for saying what you want to say in the simpliest form, shortest route from point A to point B, etc., so it's a fine line to walk. The opening line instantly struck me of something I've already heard from a previous song, something rehashed. I do really like the 3rd stanza, I've lived the "exclusively unhappy with you" so that hit home. Overall I like it, just wish it were a little more "stripped down". I like the message you’re telling but I it seems that at times you’re being lyrically clever for the sake of being clever. It’s important to avoid all the old cliches, but there’s also a lot to be said for saying what you want to say in the simpliest form, shortest route from point A to point B, etc., so it’s a fine line to walk. The opening line instantly struck me of something I’ve already heard from a previous song, something rehashed. I do really like the 3rd stanza, I’ve lived the “exclusively unhappy with you” so that hit home. Overall I like it, just wish it were a little more “stripped down”.

]]> By: Nader http://colortheory.com/exclusively-unhappy#comment-165 Nader Tue, 18 Aug 2009 15:25:04 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1181#comment-165 Hi Brian, Interesting lyrics. Not sure about "I’d be happy to remain exclusively unhappy with you"though:) Cheers Nader Hi Brian,

Interesting lyrics. Not sure about “I’d be happy to remain exclusively unhappy with you”though:)

Cheers

Nader

]]> By: Misha http://colortheory.com/exclusively-unhappy#comment-164 Misha Tue, 18 Aug 2009 12:32:21 +0000 http://colortheory.com/?p=1181#comment-164 The first color theory's song I heard was ponytail girl.I was sitting on my bed and reading a book...when the song ended I didn't care about the book anymore.I just wanted to listen this song again and again.And do you know why?Because of the lyrics and the instrumental.It was very strange feeling inside of me.I saw the girl, I saw the boy, I felt their minds, how far are the from each other.In one room, but in different worlds.So..All i want to say is that your songs are so emotionally full with colors, feelings, images, faces, states...This new text is the same.Again - i felt something special while I was reading it.Thank you and keep doing the same incredible art! Your muse is beautiful! Greetings from Bulgaria. Misha:))) The first color theory’s song I heard was ponytail girl.I was sitting on my bed and reading a book…when the song ended I didn’t care about the book anymore.I just wanted to listen this song again and again.And do you know why?Because of the lyrics and the instrumental.It was very strange feeling inside of me.I saw the girl, I saw the boy, I felt their minds, how far are the from each other.In one room, but in different worlds.So..All i want to say is that your songs are so emotionally full with colors, feelings, images, faces, states…This new text is the same.Again – i felt something special while I was reading it.Thank you and keep doing the same incredible art!
Your muse is beautiful!
Greetings from Bulgaria.
Misha:)))

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